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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 18:13, 22 January 2015 (UTC)

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Helen-Ann Hartley[edit]

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Created by Gaia Octavia Agrippa (talk). Self nominated at 11:26, 5 December 2014 (UTC).

  • Length, date, sources, neutrality, originality, QPQ, and hook verified. As for the wording of the hook, I'd recommend this compromise between the versions:
Her notability is clear enough in this version, and readers can consult the article for further explanation.--Lemuellio (talk) 21:38, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
The trouble is that she wasn't a working with the Church of England when she got elected bishop. So ALT3 is misleading in suggesting she was. She became a bishop outside of the C of E which is what I was trying to get across. Does that make sense? Or maybe I'm just being picky! Gaia Octavia Agrippa Talk 22:23, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
  • I've struck ALT1 because it is indeed too long (well over the 200 absolute max for DYK), and ALT3 based on the objections of Gaia Octavia Agrippa. Can I suggest ALT4, a variant of ALT3 that might be even more "hooky" ("but" could be "though" if you'd prefer, or it could be "but in New Zealand rather than England"), and makes it clear she isn't an English bishop? BlueMoonset (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2014 (UTC)
I like ALT4 and agree it is more hooky that the others. But, she the first woman ordained into the CofE to become a bishop. That's an important distinction because there may have been women ordained into other churches in the Anglican Communion who have worked as priests in the CofE (as part of an exchange say) who have become bishops in their home churches. Gaia Octavia Agrippa Talk 17:10, 6 December 2014 (UTC)
ALT5: ... that Helen-Ann Hartley is the first female woman to be ordained in the Church of England to become a bishop, but not in England?
Looks good to me! Thanks for the clarifications. Now the situation makes sense.
This is probably just splitting hairs, but may I make one tiny final suggestion? I think "woman" might work better than "female" in ALT5, simply because using "female" as a noun is relatively uncommon. Other than that personal preference, I'd say it's good to go!--Lemuellio (talk) 14:26, 7 December 2014 (UTC)
I have changed female to woman, I agree about the grammar issue. Hope its okay now! It's also good timing to have this particular hook on the main page as there is a lot of focus in the UK at the moment on the appointment of a female bishop. Gaia Octavia Agrippa Talk 18:39, 7 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Review of the hooks needed. BlueMoonset (talk) 06:39, 2 January 2015 (UTC)
  • I don't know much about Anglican bishopry but the original hook, ALT2 and ALT5 check out (cited here). I've stuck ALT3 based on Gaia's objection. Good to go on Lemuellio's review. Fuebaey (talk) 20:20, 21 January 2015 (UTC)
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