Template:Did you know nominations/Inger Hanmann, Charlotte Hanmann

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The result was: promoted by Montanabw(talk) 03:41, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Inger Hanmann, Charlotte Hanmann[edit]

  • ... that the enamelist Inger Hanmann and her daughter Charlotte, an artistic photographer, have both contributed significantly to Denmark's cultural heritage?

Created by Nvvchar (talk) and Ipigott (talk). Nominated by Nvvchar (talk) at 08:12, 1 June 2016 (UTC).

Thank you for two women bios! I'll look at the mother for the moment. Interesting, on good sources, Danish sources accepted AGF. Do we need such a boring hook? How about something doing more justice to each woman individually, such as "... while Hanmann (enamels at Copenhagen airport), her daughter ... (whatever she did, no time to look now). I would go as far as splitting the nom in two. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:08, 7 June 2016 (UTC)
Returning for Charlotte.
Interesting artist, on good sources, Danish sources accepted AGF. As above, could you word a bit more precisely what she did, rather than a general "contributed significantly to Denmark's cultural heritage"? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:51, 19 June 2016 (UTC)
  • Gerda Arendt Thanks for the review. Here is my ALT1 hook suggestion ... that Inger Hanmann's enamel exhibit at the Copenhagen Airport and her daughter Charlotte's picturesque processed photographs of urban environment are some of their significant contributions to Denmark's cultural heritage?Nvvchar. 06:06, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
Thank you, I like that better, but think it gets too long. Perhaps drop "Denmark's cultural heritage" which puts them in some past? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:24, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
  • Gerda Arendt Thanks. I have pruned the ALT1 hook as suggested.
ALT2: ... that Inger Hanmann's enamel exhibit at the Copenhagen Airport and her daughter Charlotte's picturesque processed photographs of urban environment are some of their significant contributions? Nvvchar. 06:51, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
Thank you, I restored ALT1, or the conversation makes no sense ;) - How is the following rewording of the same
ALT3: ... that while Inger Hanmann created enamels for the Copenhagen Airport, her daughter Charlotte made processed photographs of urban environment? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:19, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
  • Gerda Arendt. Thanks. ALT3 sounds better than all the others.Nvvchar. 11:09, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
ALT3 rewording --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:15, 20 June 2016 (UTC)