Template:Did you know nominations/Kamal Jit Singh

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:48, 31 July 2016 (UTC)

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Kamal Jit Singh[edit]

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Lt Gen Kamal Jit Singh, AVSM
Lt Gen Kamal Jit Singh, AVSM

Created/expanded by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk). Self-nominated at 14:34, 21 July 2016 (UTC).

  • Long enough. New enough. I added source to hook sentence. No paraphrasing. I think the initial hook is better and more catchy. Good to go! Étienne Dolet (talk) 06:01, 23 July 2016 (UTC)
@Yoninah: Please review the new hook I have added and corrected the his wife's name, it is actually Anita Singh. Thank you. Regards, KCVelaga ☚╣✉╠☛ 23:29, 26 July 2016 (UTC)
  • @Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: I did a little more copyediting to polish the English grammar. I'm not sure why you moved up my hook to the top of this thread, making it look like one of your own. Posts should be made in chronological order so it's clear who's suggesting what. Since your ALT2 is based on my ALT3, it should have been placed at the bottom of the page and then everyone can see that you were fine-tuning my hook – in this case, I will not be able to give the final approval because I wrote the hook in the first place.
  • Your ALT2 suggestion seems pretty long, and using "i.e." in a hook is not standard practice. Also, the source is more specific, saying he commanded an armoured brigade of T-90s. I suggest shortening and revising ALTs 2 & 3 as follows:
  • ALT4: ... that career military leader Kamal Jit Singh (pictured) has commanded both an armoured brigade of T-90s in India and a United Nations peacekeeping team in Angola? Yoninah (talk) 15:35, 27 July 2016 (UTC)
  • Thank you, @MPS1992:, but as I explained above, new hooks should appear in chronological order. I have renamed your correction ALT4a. Yoninah (talk) 20:43, 27 July 2016 (UTC)
  • So in fact, you do mind! As I explained above, I was tweaking an existing suggestion, not proposing a new one. Regardless, that is fine, I do not object. All the best, MPS1992 (talk) 21:00, 27 July 2016 (UTC)
  • @MPS1992: Of course I don't mind; I just gave your hook a different number. I'm still waiting for the nominator to respond whether he likes it or not. Yoninah (talk) 22:39, 27 July 2016 (UTC)

@Yoninah: Firstly I apologize for placing the hook above, I was just some confusion and misunderstanding. Please move it to where it fits right. I am OK with both the hooks ALT4, and ALT4a you've proposed. Regards, KCVelaga ☚╣✉╠☛ 00:36, 28 July 2016 (UTC)

  • Great. We're ready for a new reviewer to sign off on ALT4 or ALT4a (the only difference between them is the wording of the second-to-last link. Yoninah (talk) 09:17, 28 July 2016 (UTC)
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