Template:Did you know nominations/Khufiyya

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:48, 9 November 2017 (UTC)

Khufiyya

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Yu Baba Gongbei of Linxia, a representative building of the Khufiyya order

~~... that Khufiyya is one of the two Naqshbandi Sufi orders in China?~~

ALT1: ~~... that Khufiyya is the first and the oldest Sufi order established in China?~~

Created/expanded by 損齋 (talk). Self-nominated at 20:34, 20 October 2017 (UTC).

My first DYK nomination attempt.----損齋 (talk) 20:54, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Welcome to DYK! 5x expansion verified. New enough, long enough, neutrally written. As all sources are offline, unable to check for close paraphrasing. I have added two "citation needed" tags to paragraphs that lack at least one citation, per Rule D2. Images are freely-licensed. No QPQ needed for first-time nominator.
The hook, though, is not so accessible to a general audience. Could you focus on an interesting fact that doesn't use so many foreign words (aside from the bolded subject)? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 23:13, 28 October 2017 (UTC)
Hi, I have made changes accordingly. For the hook, I could not really find anything without a deeper mention of non-English words. So this one is probably better. 2 Refs are added.----損齋 (talk) 01:53, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Yes, ALT1 is a better hook, thanks. But the hook facts are not mentioned, nor cited, in the article. Yoninah (talk) 21:24, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
I see, I did not know that it has to be mentioned in the main article. Let me see what i can do.----損齋 (talk) 23:55, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
Modified, now the hook is in the article.----損齋 (talk) 00:08, 31 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you. I should have mentioned that this is listed on the DYK rules page as Eligibility criteria #3. Cited hook. You may want to review that page to check that your future article nominations are in line with the DYK criteria.
I just have one question about the hook: If it's the first, it's the oldest, right? Would you like to tweak the hook a bit by saying:
ALT1a: ... that Khufiyya is the oldest of the four Sufi orders established in China? Yoninah (talk) 01:10, 31 October 2017 (UTC)