Template:Did you know nominations/Konsert Satu Suara, Vol. 2

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:07, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Konsert Satu Suara, Vol. 2[edit]

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... that although Konsert Satu Suara, Vol. 2 originally served as a contingency plan for Siti Nurhaliza, the event later was recognized as Istana Budaya's most successful locally produced concert in 2015?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/List of songs recorded by Mariah Carey

5x expanded by Syfuel (talk). Self-nominated at 17:08, 13 February 2016 (UTC).

Article is long and new enough, copyvio free and the QPQ is done. Yet still: a number of issues are outstanding. First off: this article contains numerous grammatical errors. Those need to be corrected. Furthermore, the fair use image at the top should be shrunk in size. The hook does check out, but I request trimming it down because of its length.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 19:56, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you so much for the review. Let me copy edit again the article. But please do highlight the errors preferably in the talk section so I can learn from them. I learn faster that way. :D I will reduce the image size soon when I'm back home. For the hook, how about,

ALT1:... that although Konsert Satu Suara, Vol. 2 served as a contingency plan for Siti Nurhaliza, it was later recognized as Istana Budaya's most successful locally produced concert in 2015? SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 08:23, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

By asking to decrease the fair use image's file size, I didn't just mean within the article; the actual file itself too. But I suppose I can do that for you real quick. With regards to the copyedit: it's closer, but the article has still got a long way to go. Examples of the prose being unintelligble or grammatically incorrect are too numerous too list. Therefore I suggest submitting this article to the GoCe at WP:GOCER.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 19:13, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

How about the alternative hook, is that okay? I've submitted the article to the GoCe. In the mean time, I will still try to copyedit the article to the best of my abilities. I've uploaded a smaller size of the poster to replace one that I have uploaded. It's smaller in both size (almost half the size) and resolution but the wording on the poster is still intelligible. SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 00:00, 10 March 2016 (UTC)

Yes, I could see myself approving ALT1 after this article is thoroughly copyedited.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 02:04, 10 March 2016 (UTC)

I've submitted the article for copy-edit on March 9th, so now I'm waiting for one of the volunteers to copyedit it. :D SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 01:24, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

That's great to hear! One caveat (that I'm just informing you about in advance, as a precaution): be aware that you're still the one responsible for getting this resolved within a reasonable timeframe.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 11:52, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Sure! I'm waiting and checking the CoCer page on a daily basis while trying to copyedit to the best of my ability. Thank you for the heads-up! SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 13:07, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

A little update, the text is now has been copyedited and now ready for another DYK evaluation. :D SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 01:29, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

New review needed now that copyedit is complete. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:59, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- New at time of nomination, certainly long enough, neutral (very balanced critical response section), verifiable with inline cites, only copyvios detected were properly attributed quotes. Hook is short enough, has an inline cite, and is neutral enough. I'm a bit concerned about the vagueness of "most successful". The metric for this is ticket sales according to the source, but that isn't evident in the main text of the article. Would you mind more clearly defining what "most successful" means in the body of the article and the hook? It's probably better to emphasize most ticket sales over most successful. ~ Rob^Talk 15:33, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Thanks for the review! :D What the line mean is that the show is the highest-grossing based on ticket sales for a show that was done by a local production at Istana Budaya. In the original article, the author equates "highest grossing ticket sales = most successful". Let me rewrite the phrase in the main text to make it clearer. :D So, the alternative hook would be:

ALT2:... that although Konsert Satu Suara, Vol. 2 served as a contingency plan for Siti Nurhaliza, it was later recognized as the highest-grossing locally produced concert at Istana Budaya for 2015? SyFuel ^Ignite _Burned 17:06, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

With that change, ALT2 is good to go. ~ Rob^Talk 17:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)