Template:Did you know nominations/List of German Jewish military personnel of World War I

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:13, 12 March 2016 (UTC)

German Jewish military personnel of World War I[edit]

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... that an estimated 100,000 German Jews served in the German Army in World War I?

ALT1:... that an estimated 12,000 German Jews were killed in action while serving in the German Army in World War I?

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Created by Calistemon (talk). Self-nominated at 12:22, 25 February 2016 (UTC).

Interesting topic, and the hook is interesting. ALT2 is my attempt to combine them. Article is long enough, well sourced, hook info is sourced in the text, AGF on German language sources. – Muboshgu (talk) 05:44, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

ALT2: ... that an estimated 100,000 German Jews served in the German Army in World War I, and an estimated 12,000 were killed in action?

I like your suggestion but having estimated in there twice sounds a little wrong. What about:

ALT3: ... that an estimated 100,000 German Jews served in the German Army in World War I, of which 12,000 were killed in action?

I looked over the two sources used for the information again and, while the 100,000 are an estimate both are firm on the 12,000 number (as a rounded figure). Calistemon (talk) 07:09, 28 February 2016 (UTC)