Template:Did you know nominations/London South Africa RFC

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 23:59, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

London South Africa RFC

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• ... that London South Africa RFC attempted to buy a National League 1 club and Wimbledon RFC before starting as a new club at the bottom of English rugby after the RFU blocked them from doing so? Source: Sunday Tribune

• Reviewed: Woodside, Old Windsor

Created by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 17:45, 2 March 2018 (UTC).

• Article is new and long enough. Hook is cited but I think it is slightly meandering. I also think Wimbledon should be "Wimbledon RFC" to avoid confusion. I would suggest "... that London South Africa RFC started as a new club at the bottom of English rugby after the RFU blocked their attempts to buy a National League 1 club and Wimbledon RFC?" or something similar. Hrodvarsson (talk) 22:27, 5 March 2018 (UTC)

• @Hrodvarsson: Fine by me, it just seems like what I had proposed reversed. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 23:53, 5 March 2018 (UTC)

• It is, yes, my version reads more clearly to me. I will add my suggestion as ALT1 below but since you have substituted "Wimbledon" for "Wimbledon RFC" in the original hook the closing editor could choose whichever version they prefer. Hrodvarsson (talk) 00:23, 6 March 2018 (UTC)
• ALT1: ... that London South Africa RFC started as a new club at the bottom of English rugby after the RFU blocked their attempts to buy a National League 1 club and Wimbledon RFC?