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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Alex Shih (talk) 13:44, 9 July 2017 (UTC)

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Ludington family[edit]

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Created by Janweh64 (talk) and Doug Coldwell (talk). Nominated by Doug Coldwell (talk) at 19:23, 5 May 2017 (UTC).

Substantial article, valid expansion, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Hook: for project Germany, a "city" has more than 100.000 inhabitants. Is that just German? - Article: can the lead please give a bit of time and places? "throughout the United States" seems vague ;) - Otherwise just waiting for qpq. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:07, 7 May 2017 (UTC)
@Gerda Arendt: Yes, that sounds like just German. I live in the city of Ludington, Michigan of about 8,000 inhabitants. I have asked my co-creator (original starter of the article) to do the QPQ, since I have written about 90% of the article. I'll do tomorrow, if it doesn't get done.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:23, 7 May 2017 (UTC)
Fine, no rush. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:28, 7 May 2017 (UTC)
@Gerda Arendt and Doug Coldwell: QPQ is done.  —አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk) 04:33, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
What you did was say that the article is too short, with a "no"-icon. Please don't use "no" for things that can be fixed, better reserve it for things such as "too late", which can't be helped. You can decide if you just wait for the reviewed article to grow and then complete the review, or review a different one now and use the review of The Darkest Minds (film) later. No rush, I'd say ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:02, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
@Gerda Arendt: I believe you have misread the review page. The hard "no" was from a previous reviewer that found the article too short. I counted the characters as over the 1500 limit as of the time of my review. The article was expanded in time for my review. I am simply awaiting the nominator of The Darkest Minds (film) to complete their QPQ, at which time I will give the good to go tick. —አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk) 07:33, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
You are right, sorry about me misreading, I wasn't quite awake ;)
- not a DYK requirement, but I would still like to see more precise places and dates in the lead, such as the four "cities" the four people mentioned in the hook founded, and dates, because "centuries" at the very end of the paragraph don't give the reader an idea about time early enough, imo. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:54, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote this, and did some editing on the article, but I can't understand this passage at all:
This particular loyal soldier was then vested with a patent of nobility and a coat of arms for the Ludington family - Pale of six argent and azure on a chief, gules a lion passant and gardant. Crest, a palmer's staff, erect. Motto, Probum non penitet.
Could you rewrite that in a proper sentence? Yoninah (talk) 12:55, 16 May 2017 (UTC)
  • @Yoninah: - will my rewording work? The reference wording on bottom of page 4 of Johnson source reads, Because of these loyal exploits, we are told, he was invested with a patent of nobility, and with the coat of arms thereafter borne by the Ludington family, to wit ( according to Burke's Heraldry): Pale of six argent and azure on a chief, gules a lion passant and gardant. Crest, a palmer's staff, erect. Motto, Probum nonpenitet. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:32, 16 May 2017 (UTC)
  • @Doug Coldwell: thank you for seeing to this. But the elements of the coat of arms are interesting, so I paraphrased the elements on it.
  • I wonder if you want to make the hook a little more explicit, like:
  • ALT1: ... that Henry, Lewis, Nelson and James of the Ludington family are associated with the founding of cities in New York, Wisconsin, and Michigan?
  • Alternately, it seems you have much juicier hooks in the article. Like:
  • ALT2: ... that the Ludington family included a teenage girl whose midnight ride to alert the Continental Army of an imminent British attack has been compared to the ride of Paul Revere?Yoninah (talk) 19:24, 16 May 2017 (UTC)
  • @Yoninah: I love your alternates - I am being bold and withdrawing my original hook. I lean more for ALT2 (60% favor), but ALT1 (40% favor) is excellent as well. I'll leave it to the promoter (whomever that may be). Thanks for paraphrasing the elements on the coat-of-arms. I couldn't have said it better myself = as obviously I didn't.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:48, 16 May 2017 (UTC)
ALT3: ... that Henry, Lewis, Nelson and James of the Ludington family are associated with the founding of cities in Michigan, New York and Wisconsin?
I put them in alphabetical order, to make New York (which might be read as a city) not the first. I think the original hook was more appealing to people outside the US but if you want. ALT2 is to complicated for my taste but perhaps you can find another reviewer ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:56, 16 May 2017 (UTC)
I was talking about ALT0 vs. ALT1, but confess that Paul Revere's Ride tells me nothing. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 05:03, 18 May 2017 (UTC)
Statue of Sybil Ludington on horeseback
Statue of Sybil Ludington on horeseback
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  • Comment to promoter - can this be set as #1 in queue as I believe it will get many hits from students. Thanks!--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:21, 17 May 2017 (UTC)
  • @Doug Coldwell: maybe it would be more accurate to call her ride a "night-long ride" rather than a "midnight ride". Yoninah (talk) 20:10, 17 May 2017 (UTC)
  • @Yoninah: I agree - copy edited ALT4. I quoted sources that support hook.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:22, 17 May 2017 (UTC)
Comment A digression: "Listen my children and you shall hear, of the Midnight Ride of Paul Revere" Memorialized in a poem. Henry Wadsworth Longfellow (1807-1882). "The Midnight Ride of Paul Revere". {{cite web}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)CS1 maint: numeric names: authors list (link)
Should have been, 'Listen my children and take a pause, to think of the ride of William Dawes.' 7&6=thirteen (☎) 13:30, 4 June 2017 (UTC)
  • - new reviewer needed for ALT2 and/or ALT4.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:34, 5 June 2017 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure why this nomination has been hanging around for such a long time. ALT4 is the more accurate hook and is acceptable. The image is appropriately licensed and should be used if possible. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:31, 8 July 2017 (UTC)
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