Template:Did you know nominations/María Ávila Serna
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The result was: promoted by Montanabw(talk) 21:21, 4 August 2016 (UTC)
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María Ávila Serna
[edit]- ... that María Ávila Serna's first two spouses were assassinated?
- ALT1:... that María Ávila Serna spent six years as the state president of the PVEM in the state of Chihuahua?
- Reviewed: Rubin Patiția
5x expanded by Raymie (talk). Self-nominated at 00:27, 9 July 2016 (UTC).
Some issues found.
- ✓ This biographical article has been expanded from 237 chars to 1745 chars since 17:22, 19 June 2016 (UTC), a 7.36-fold expansion
- ✓ This article meets the DYK criteria at 1745 characters
- ✓ All paragraphs in this article have at least one citation
- Note that this is a biographical article about a living person. All claims must be cited to a reliable source.
✗ This article has the following issues:Removed Raymie (t • c) 02:47, 9 July 2016 (UTC){{Mexico-politician-EcologistGreen-stub}}
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- ✓ The probability of copyright violation is 2.0%. (confirm)
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- No overall issues detected
- ✓ The hook ALT0 is an appropriate length at 54 characters
- ✓ The hook ALT1 is an appropriate length at 97 characters
- ✓ Raymie has 40 DYK credits. A QPQ review of Template:Did you know nominations/Rubin Patiția was performed for this nomination.
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This article is new enough and long enough. Although the ALT0 hook has an inline citation, I think the word "murdered" in article and hook could be better replaced by "assassinated". ALT1 is fine. The use of the terms "four kids" and "break in" (as a burglar?) were unencyclopedic so I have replaced them. Otherwise, the article is neutral, and with the sources being in Spanish, it is difficult to check for policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:49, 2 August 2016 (UTC)
- @Cwmhiraeth: I agree on the suggested tweak and have made it to the ALT0 hook and the article. Does this change require a re-review? Raymie (t • c) 05:36, 4 August 2016 (UTC)
Thanks. ALT0 is now also approved and makes a dramatic hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:44, 4 August 2016 (UTC)