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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by PanydThe muffin is not subtle 12:29, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

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Marina Chan[edit]

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Created by Ianblair23 (talk). Self nominated at 11:24, 15 September 2014 (UTC).

  • "readable prose size" OK, Article created by Ianblair23 on September 14, 2014. QfQ OK. The article uses about 80 sources, mostly tables, and is more or less parroting the content of race result sheets. Needs some boiling down quality wise. I like the hook most, which is more of a teaser ;) Serten (talk) 08:47, 20 October 2014 (UTC)
  • Nominator's talk page has been posted to twice on this, the last time over a week ago, and nominator has been actively editing, including a new DYK nomination. Closing this one due to inaction; the article also has a copyedit template that would need attention. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:39, 16 November 2014 (UTC)
Apologies guys, I missed the notice on my talk page and just received another prompt from BlueMoonset. I will address the issues with the article now. -- Ianblair23 (talk) 05:55, 16 November 2014 (UTC)
Hi guys, I have just expanded the lead and personal life sections, added in more commentary on her personal best times and national age records achieved, added a quote box and list of her PBs. I couldn't find an appropriate image but will keep searching. I hope that this satisfactory and that the review can be completed. -- Ianblair23 (talk) 12:49, 16 November 2014 (UTC)
  • New review needed now that article has been significantly revised. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:21, 16 November 2014 (UTC)
Like Serten, I'm not a huge fan of reems of stats masquarading in prose. This article comes across like some overenthusiastic parent trying desperately to exihibit how important they think their child is. It only needs 1500 characters for DYK, so can we summerise relevant stats (records/medal wins) and leave out routine 'she swam here' youth positions/times please. Fuebaey (talk) 06:30, 18 November 2014 (UTC)
@Fuebaey:, thanks for the feedback. I have trimmed down the career section as suggested. If you could have another look and respond that would be appreciated. Cheers -- Ianblair23 (talk) 08:36, 18 November 2014 (UTC)
That's definitely better. One last thing, I'd be willing to accept this if you correctly attribute your hook citation. It currently is named as a The Straits Times reference but links to an article on AsiaOne. I realise that the story originally came from the newspaper but you need to cite the link you provide, not the source that it's based on (the same way we don't attribute Reuters or Associated Press for the majority of wired stories on other news sites). Either that or find the original newspaper story and cite that. Fuebaey (talk) 06:14, 19 November 2014 (UTC)
@Fuebaey: Good pick up! I have added AsiaOne to the ref by the 'via' parameter. If there is anything else, please let me know. Thank you again for your review. Cheers -- Ianblair23 (talk) 07:50, 19 November 2014 (UTC)
Good to go then. New article, nominated next day. More than 1500 characters long, most of which is cited to result tables but does have other references that go to meet WP:GNG. No obvious copyright violations or close paraphrasing. Hook is mentioned and cited. Fuebaey (talk) 11:55, 19 November 2014 (UTC)
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