Template:Did you know nominations/Mary Jobe Akeley

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:30, 5 February 2019 (UTC)

Mary Jobe Akeley[edit]

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Mary Jobe (not yet Akeley) in 1913

~~... that Mary Jobe Akeley was a mountaineer, ethnographer, African explorer, photographer, author, the founder of an outdoors adventure camp for girls and has a mountain peak named after her?~~

ALT1: ~~... that Mary Jobe Akeley was a mountaineer, African explorer, and the founder of an outdoors adventure camp for girls?~~

Created by Kenirwin (talk). Self-nominated at 22:13, 16 December 2018 (UTC).

Everything looks good to go. Article is new enough and long enough. Hook is interesting and includes content properly sourced in the article. Picture is in public domain and of good quality. No QPQ required. FiendYT ★ 23:13, 16 December 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I keep coming by to promote this, but honestly, the hook is just a long string of nouns and I lose interest in the middle. Would it be possible to write a catchy hook just about one or two of her accomplishments? Yoninah (talk) 18:27, 5 January 2019 (UTC)

I've removed several of the accomplishment. I agree with your sentiment, Yoninah, but I also think that the variety of accomplishments is part of what makes it interesting. I hope the remaining three are sufficiently streamlined to answer the need. Kenirwin/(talk) 22:52, 6 January 2019 (UTC)

I'd like to suggest a hook that focuses on just one accomplishment. I'd also like to note that there is a discrepancy between the first 2 paragraphs under Mountaineering: in the first, it says she started her trek to Big Ice Mountain in 1914, while in the second, it says she reached the base in 1913.
ALT2: ... that mountaineer Mary Jobe Akeley was hailed as "the first white person and probably the first human being" to explore a remote peak in the Canadian Rockies that she called "Big Ice Mountain"? Yoninah (talk) 21:35, 10 January 2019 (UTC)

ALT2 seems like a good solution. I'd be happy to go with that. Thank you for the suggestions! Is there anything I need to do to sign off on it, or is this statement enough? Kenirwin/(talk) 02:45, 11 January 2019 (UTC)

No, your approval of the hook is enough. Now we need a reviewer to check and approve ALT2. Pinging @FiendYT:. Yoninah (talk) 13:42, 11 January 2019 (UTC)

A whole new review is needed because FiendYT was banned for undisclosed paid editing. SL93 (talk) 07:27, 20 January 2019 (UTC)

No copyvio, interesting and well-referenced article, might need slight copyedit but nothing serious. Hook cited in article. Good to go with ALT2. Kingsif (talk) 19:06, 20 January 2019 (UTC)