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The result was: promoted by Montanabw(talk) 05:56, 23 July 2015 (UTC)
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Paramahamsa Parivrajaka Upanishad
[edit]... that literally Paramahamsa is "supreme swan" and "Parivarjaka" means "wandering", which are prefixed to Upanishad (pictured Narayana who explains the Upanishad), and which symbolize spiritual discrimination?
Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 14:48, 14 June 2015 (UTC).
- qpq done, long and new enough, prose and inline citation checks, image checks, interesting article. Good 2 go.--BabbaQ (talk) 22:39, 12 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Nvvchar: is this the best hook you could come up with? It's hard to follow, and the parenthetical "pictured" is too long. Yoninah (talk) 20:33, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Yoninah: Thanks for the review. I am suggesting this ALT1 Hook ... that in Paramahamsa Parivrajaka Upanishad, Adi Narayana (pictured) explains that a renouncer is an intelligent person who has learned the Vedic scriptures the hard way through a guru? --Nvvchar. 21:15, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks. Would you like to clarify "renouncer", perhaps saying instead: "...explains that one who wishes to renounce material comforts..."? Also, the last paragraph in the article is run-on and doesn't make sense. Yoninah (talk) 21:39, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Yoninah:. Last para deleted. Suggesting ALT2 Hook
... that in Paramahamsa Parivrajaka Upanishad Adi Narayana (pictured) explains that one who wishes to renounce material comforts is a person who has learned the Vedic scriptures from a Guru?--Nvvchar. 21:57, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking care of that paragraph :). On second thought, since you don't define "renouncer" in the article, but just link it, let's link it in the hook, too. People who want to know will click on it. ALT1 hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 22:01, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Yoninah:. Last para deleted. Suggesting ALT2 Hook