Template:Did you know nominations/Park Avenue main line

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:08, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

Park Avenue main line[edit]

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... that Grand Central Terminal was built after a deadly crash between two trains in the Park Avenue Tunnel in 1902? Source: Cudahy, Brian J. (2003). A Century of Subways: Celebrating 100 Years of New York's Underground Railways. New York: Fordham University Press. ISBN 0-8232-2292-6. pp. 194-197
- ALT1:... that the first rear-end collision in the United States may have occurred along a surface section of the New York and Harlem Railroad line in New York City in 1832? Source: Grogan, Louis V. (1989). The Coming of the New York and Harlem Railroad. Louis V. Grogan. ISBN 0962120650. p. 5.

Reviewed: Montclair Heights station

5x expanded by Kew Gardens 613 (talk). Nominated by Epicgenius (talk) at 00:19, 22 January 2019 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy compliance:

Adequate sourcing:
Neutral:
Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:
Other problems: - The reference section needs a good deal of cleanup. A few redundant ones need to be combined (16 and 17, for example), links need to be added, and Newspaper.com references need to be acknowledged on all occasions.

Hook eligibility:

Cited: - ALT0 not cited in the immediate sentence; the hook should also mention New York City, just in case people aren't fully aware of the location. ALT1 would need to be supported by multiple sources or given a stronger backing; I really doubt that this was the first of its kind in the U.S.
Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Almost good to go, but I would like to see the reference cleanup before this hits the main page. There are also a lot of awkward word choices that jump out, so I'd suggest a copyedit as well. Sounder Bruce 09:10, 4 February 2019 (UTC)

Response I removed the redundant citations, added many links and Newspaper.com references. Can you give some examples of awkward word choices? Thanks. Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 14:45, 4 February 2019 (UTC)

SounderBruce, I made some copyedits to some of the sections. If anything in particular is still outstanding, feel free to let one of us know, and I'll try to fix up the rest of the page. epicgenius (talk) 03:02, 5 February 2019 (UTC)

Overall, I do see a few issues remaining (especially in the reference department...each book should have an OCLC number at the minimum), but nothing that doesn't meet the laxer standards here at DYK. You'd need to clean it up further for GAN. Sounder Bruce 08:31, 9 February 2019 (UTC)