Template:Did you know nominations/Shimonoseki Station massacre
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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:30, 18 April 2012 (UTC)
Shimonoseki Station massacre[edit]
- ... that five people died at the Shimonoseki Station in Japan when a man drove a car onto the platform in a deliberate attack?
- Reviewed: Roy Marten
Created/expanded by Nienk (talk). Self nom at 23:18, 31 March 2012 (UTC)
I've tweaked the wording of the hook to make it closer to the article. Speaking of which, I've copyedited the article, so do please check that. I've added a couple of clarifys me you will need to address. In addition, link 1 is dead and this needs addressing. Please could you provide a quote here from one of the sources which you think succinctly references the point being made in the hook? That would be very helpful with regard verifying the hook(no need to translate it, just as it appears in the sources, with ellipsis if necessary). I also am yet to check for close paraphrasing/copyvio. Dates and length look fine. - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 19:19, 15 April 2012 (UTC)
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- Please could you provide a quote here from one of the sources which you think succinctly references the point being made in the hook? That would be very helpful with regard verifying the hook (no need to translate it, just as it appears in the sources, with ellipsis if necessary). I also still yet to check for close paraphrasing/copyvio. Also, his family name is Uwabe, right? I just corrected myself on that (apologies for before). - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 18:16, 17 April 2012 (UTC)
From source number 3 "Defense attorneys for a 35-year-old man who in September randomly killed five people and injured 10 others"
"Uwabe drove into a concourse at Shimonoseki Station with a rented car and ran down passersby, leaving two dead and five injured. He then stabbed three people to death and wounded five" Nienk (talk) 19:37, 17 April 2012 (UTC)
Good to go - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 20:37, 17 April 2012 (UTC)
