Template:Did you know nominations/Su Bingqi

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:35, 1 April 2018 (UTC)

Su Bingqi[edit]

Su Bingqi in 1945
Su Bingqi in 1945

Moved to mainspace by Zanhe (talk). Self-nominated at 19:57, 28 February 2018 (UTC).

  • Image is OK. Article is new enough, long enough. Hook is verified (though not very exciting--a more exciting hook is found, maybe, in his introduction of that multi-regional model) (and I wonder if "was" is the proper verb tense to use, given the source). But there is too much close paraphrasing; much of it is passable, maybe, but parts of the last paragraph (look for "synthesizes") really need to be either rephrased or just cited directly. Drmies (talk) 20:14, 1 March 2018 (UTC)
@Drmies: Thanks for your review. I've edited the last paragraph a bit more, and it's quite thoroughly paraphrased in my view. I don't know what else could be done other than directly quoting entire sentences or deleting them. As for the hook, How about ALT1:
  • ALT1 ... that Su Bingqi (pictured), China's paramount archaeologist, proposed a "heretical" multi-region model for prehistoric China which rejected the traditional view that Chinese civilization radiated from the Central Plain?
-Zanhe (talk) 05:39, 2 March 2018 (UTC)
  • ALT1 is fine. Drmies (talk) 06:02, 2 March 2018 (UTC)