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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Bruxton talk 23:15, 16 January 2024 (UTC)

Tap Pryor

Created by Connormah (talk). Self-nominated at 07:06, 16 December 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Tap Pryor; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

  • Cited: Yes
  • Interesting: No - The ALT0 hook is just not interesting to a broad audience; some context as to who Pryor is would make it better.

QPQ: No - Pending
Overall: Would like to see some more hooks. SounderBruce 07:20, 17 December 2023 (UTC)

SounderBruce, my initial idea was to do something around his time spent in Africa in his younger years, but the details seem to be inconsistently given ("walked across" vs "hitchhiked") in the two newspaper sources in the article and I couldn't really come up with anything to account for it while still remaining interesting. He was quite the character, though, going off of the newspaper articles. Did you have any ideas? Connormah (talk) 03:49, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
@Connormah: Do you have any proposals for hooks? @SounderBruce: Any ideas on what content is interesting to use as a hook? Z1720 (talk) 00:59, 27 December 2023 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that Tap Pryor hitchhiked across Africa as a young man and first saw a coral reef in Zanzibar which inspired him to spend his life "under water"? Source: [1]
ALT1 ... that former Hawaii state senator and retired Marine Corps helicopter pilot Tap Pryor founded Sea Life Park Hawaii at Makapuʻu Point in 1964, and later established an aquaculture farm in 1981? Source: [1][2]
Connormah (talk) 03:03, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
ALT1 is close to being usable, but needs to be trimmed. The second one is not interesting at all. SounderBruce 04:14, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
ALT1a: ... that Tap Pryor saw a coral reef in Zanzibar that inspired him to spend his life "under water"?
Suggesting a more succinct ALT1a. I did not check to ensure that it was supported in the article or source. Z1720 (talk) 04:49, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
The source quote is "I decided to spend a lot of my life under water", so I think this is acceptable. ALT1a is good to go. SounderBruce 07:27, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
That sounds great, thanks! QPQ is also now done and added above. Connormah (talk) 07:16, 3 January 2024 (UTC)

References

  1. ^ a b c Wall, A.E.P. (April 26, 1964). "The Man Who Put Windows In Davy Jones's Locker". Honolulu Star-Bulletin. Free access icon
  2. ^ Hastings, Barbara (September 6, 1978). "A Pryor commitment to oysters". The Honolulu Advertiser. p. A1. Free access icon