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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Montanabw(talk) 17:28, 3 January 2020 (UTC)

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The Beautiful World of Jeffree Star

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Dawson in 2016
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  • Comment: I like ALT1 better. I'm not even sure if we need the image, or if the image is even fitting for the hook.

Created/expanded by Abequinn14 (talk) and Jayab314 (talk). Nominated by Abequinn14 (talk) at 05:10, 29 November 2019 (UTC).

  • New enough and long enough 5x expansion. Hook is cited to sources, backed up and included in article. Nominator's first DYK—no QPQ needed. @Abequinn14: The Earwig tool does suggest that the sentence beginning "Star attached a screenshot of an email (shown on right)" should be reworded in order to avoid close paraphrasing of Metro, though. (The length of the namesake of the article does cause Earwig to give higher scores than usual.) I'm giving this a tick, but that probably is worth resolving. Raymie (t • c) 03:39, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
Raymie, I think I have resolved that issue. Earwig is still giving a high score from the twitter quotes used in the article; I consider the quotes to be independent from the Metro article, so we're set now. | abequinnfourteen 04:23, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
Seems good then. Yeah, common phrases and proper nouns, as well as those Twitter quotes, are kind of important to have, even if they give Earwig fits. Raymie (t • c) 04:26, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
  • Hi, I came by to promote this, but the hook is exaggerating; it wasn't minutes, but half an hour. The hook is also incredibly vague on just what is the Conspiracy Collection and what is The Beautiful World of Jeffree Star. Readers would be more inclined to pass over such a hook than spend time clicking on it. Yoninah (talk) 20:18, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
ALT2: ... that The Conspiracy Collection, a makeup palette whose creation is profiled in The Beautiful World of Jeffree Star, sold out within 40in 30 minutes?
@Raymie:, if we're talking about the palette, its the Conspiracy palette, rather than "The Conspiracy Collection".
Now we have a couple of things interesting about this article, namely: the collection, the production, and the reception. Knowing this, I'm going to make another suggestion:
ALT3: ... that filming for The Beautiful World of Jeffree Star, a web series about the makeup collection The Conspiracy Collection, continued as the series was published?
I would add the detail that filming began in January 2019, but that seems a little long... | abequinnfourteen 22:31, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
Sorry, but knowing nothing about these subjects, I don't find ALT3 hooky at all. I like Raymie's ALT2. Yoninah (talk) 23:04, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
OK, I'm fine with that. | abequinnfourteen 23:24, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
  • Thanks. I tweaked ALT2 per the source. ALT2 hook refs verified and cited inline. Rest of review per Raymie. ALT2 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 23:34, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
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