Template:Did you know nominations/The Broken Cord
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:26, 17 July 2017 (UTC)
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The Broken Cord
[edit]- ... that a real life subject of the film The Broken Cord, who was diagnosed with fetal alcohol syndrome, died by being hit by a car before the film's release?
- Reviewed: Der Prozeß (opera)
- Comment: I'm surprised I even found this many sources to use for such an old television film.
Created by SL93 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:57, 28 June 2017 (UTC).
Interesting TV film, on good sources, offline source accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. - Hook: if taken as it is, it should be a real life subjct, because he is not the only one. I'd add at least film - it could be anything - unless you want to focus on that tragedy alone. I confess that the topic of caring for a son with special needs seems worth mentioning somehow. - Article: on this same page, I was told that if quotes were subtracted, it would be too short. Without "counting": could you add a bit, for example to plot, or reception? Looking at the beginning: that is a bit ambiguous, - It reads as if Adam was a different child from the one in the sentence before. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:27, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- I changed the hook and expanded the article's plot and production sections. SL93 (talk) 15:37, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- Ping Gerda Arendt SL93 (talk) 18:48, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- Thank you for the changes. The last line of the plot looks too general, not for the film, imo. - Next time, please word an ALT, - to leave the discussion transparent. What do you think of this:
- ALT1: ... that a real life subject of the film The Broken Cord, who suffered from fetal alcohol syndrome, died being hit by a car before the film's release? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:24, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- That's fine. Should I remove the last sentence from the plot then? SL93 (talk) 19:29, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
both, - prep builder can decide. - You decide about the sentence ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:42, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- That's fine. Should I remove the last sentence from the plot then? SL93 (talk) 19:29, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
