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A. T. Mahmud[edit]

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk)

  • ... that A. T. Mahmud eventually wrote up to 500 songs after being asked to help his students?

5x expanded by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self nom at 05:45, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Looks good, but the hook isn't very informative. Suggest ALT1: ... that Indonesia's A. T. Mahmud has been described as a legendary composer of children's songs? Gatoclass (talk) 13:18, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not bad, but how about "... that Indonesia's A. T. Mahmud, writer of around 500 children's songs, has been described as a legendary composer?"
"Around" could theoretically be eliminated too. Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:45, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
ALT3: - that "legendary" Indonesian composer A. T. Mahmud wrote around 500 children's songs? It's more concise than the other hooks and contains the same or more info. I retained "around" however because the source says "about". Gatoclass (talk) 13:42, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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