User:Binky1110/transformational leadership peer review

The lead section of this article does well in explaining Transformational Leadership as far as its origin and what a Transformational Leader is. However, the lead section should also tell readers the relevance of the topic and why it is important, as implications should be apart of the article. A good example of what could’ve been included is how are organizations, if any, benefiting from or implementing transformational leadership practices? A part from that, I think the lead section is well written, includes useful information on the topic, and has citations when needed.

The overall structure of this article isn’t awful, but it can be improved in terms of some ideas being combined instead of separated, and removing some sections that don’t aid in explaining the idea and its content. For example, there is a section in the article entitled “effectiveness as compared to other leadership styles”. For starters, Wikipedia isn’t a platform for comparing and contrasting, but rather stating what a topic is about and all history and information that is out that about that specific topic. Instead making that section a compare and contrast section, which introduces bias, that section could be about how organizations are using transformational leadership and how this particular leadership style is being used in research. Some of the language throughout the article puts forth a tone that the writer was trying to shed light on why transformational leadership is better than a few other leadership styles rather than just stating the outcomes of practicing transformational leadership.

For the most part, I couldn’t tell what the person’s point of view was, until the section on “effectiveness as compared to other leadership styles”. That seems to be the only section that can potentially distract any readers that come across this article for information. There isn’t anywhere in the article where the writer seemed to be making claims on behalf of unnamed groups. However, there are statements that seem to need citation that doesn’t include any. For example, the article states “Burns theorized that transforming and transactional leadership were mutually exclusive styles. Later, researcher Bernard M. Bass expanded upon Burns' original ideas to develop what is today referred to as Bass’ Transformational Leadership Theory. According to Bass, transformational leadership can be defined based on the impact that it has on followers. Transformational leaders, Bass suggested, garner trust, respect, and admiration from their followers.”, but there is no citation for a reader to find where this “Burns theory” came from. Overall, the article seems to be neutral in stating what transformational leadership is and all that it entails.

As far as the sources used, the sources seem to be reliable sources for the most part. There are a few sources used that are primary sources, such as “ Bass, B. M. (1985). Leadership and Performance Beyond Expectations. New York: Free Press.” However, it is used in a context where a primary source was needed to better explain what was being said. Other than that, the writer used reliable sources that helped in getting the idea laid out plainly for readers.

In conclusion, this is a well written article with a few needed changes. It is obvious to me that the previous editor did a good job in doing research and getting the ideas down in writing, along with making sure that it all followed Wikipedia’s guidelines for writing new articles/ editing existing articles. It has a clear structure, neutral content, acceptable lead section, and majority reliable sources.