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Peer review

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This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

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Lead

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Guiding questions:

  • Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
  • Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
  • Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
  • Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
  • Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation

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I though the lead was very complete and that it provided the main ideas in the first paragraph. I was able to see all the sections in the content below.

Content

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Guiding questions:

  • Is the content added relevant to the topic?
  • Is the content added up-to-date?
  • Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation

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I thought the article was pretty comprehensive. There wasn't anything that didn't belong. I think the part on the original park in New York can be expanded on a bit such as in what ways was this park designed to mimic the one in New York 1903.

Tone and Balance

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Guiding questions:

  • Is the content added neutral?
  • Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
  • Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
  • Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation

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I thought the tone was very neutral and presented the events without making persuasive claims or an argument towards either side.

Sources and References

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Guiding questions:

  • Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
  • Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
  • Are the sources current?
  • Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation

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There were many sources used in this small article. Many of them seem like reliable sources including the journal and from Princeton and articles on Japanese cinema.

Organization

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Guiding questions:

  • Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
  • Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
  • Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation

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I thought it was organized well in discussing some of its background information first then going into the fire in 1911. I think it might help if the sections had a heading separating history/background from the fire incident.

Images and Media

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Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

  • Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
  • Are images well-captioned?
  • Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
  • Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation

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There was one picture of the main gate in the article captioned Luna Park's main gate. I think the caption can be more detailed by including the year it was taken or note if there was an event going on (I know it might be a bit hard to find)

For New Articles Only

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If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

  • Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
  • How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
  • Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
  • Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation

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Overall impressions

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Guiding questions:

  • Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
  • What are the strengths of the content added?
  • How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation

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Overall I thought it was an interesting article and I learned a lot about the topic. I think it can be expanded on more, but this is a really great start.