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Jump to search OLES2129 Added Citation: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Gnosticism&oldid=854713089 Article Edit Analysis: Royal Game of Ur article (Royal Game of Ur). First article contained poor uses of links to other wikipedia pages and contwined areas of poor grammar. Content wise, it was also quite short and had few citations. If I had made the article, deeper connections to more academic references would have been made as well as better structure. The first major edit (https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Royal_Game_of_Ur&diff=41308247&oldid=30464497) fixed grammatical errors and added more citations to back up existing arguments. If I had been that editor, I would have also expanded the content with these new references and utilised the new information to a fuller extent. Week 4: Random Article Improvements Activity 1; Boston Consumptives Hospital; Improvements can be found in paragraph structure, which offers a convoluted and poorly spaced discussion of the Hospital's features. The lack of citations and poor formatting of the words in relation to the text make for an uncomfortable viewing experience. Could be improved by more effective language, better formatting and citations as well as more content to provide explanations and background. Activity 2; China National Petroleum Corporation Placed tag for citation in New Zealand section Activity 3; Postage stamps and postal history of India Marked that the paraphrasing was too close in the 'ancient and medieval' section, created talk page Activity 4; Mutsu: Mieru Me Added that the characters section required more detail