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This space for revision notes for the Matthew W Bullock article. Collaborator: User:Smkolins Goals: - clarity and readability -include all major achievements with appropriate detail (working on understanding what that is for WP -adhere to WP guidelines

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DRAFT Outline: (made before I read the whole article)

Heading: Early years - categories based on the Jackie Robinson article:

subheading: Family and Personal life

Subheading:

Professional football(list teams)

Parole Board

Baha'i Faith

Retirement

Personal life

Contemporary Impact and/or Legacy

editing in progress:

Bullock attended Dartmouth College from 1901 to 1904. In additional to support from his parents, Bullock raised tuition funds through singing, and side jobs. At Dartmouth, he sang in the Glee Club and ran track. Bullock sang as a baritone soloist at a Vermont Church in April, 1903.

Bullock was the first African American to play football at Dartmouth. He did not play a game the first year and started the second year as a defensive end. During his junior year he only played the first six games. In his senior year Bullock was on the varsity football team and achieved national recognition as part of the Dartmouth football team that defeated Harvard at the dedication of the Dartmouth stadium in later 1903. When the team played Princeton, Princeton Inn refused to provide Bullock with lodging and he sustained a dislocated shoulder during the game. ...... which were widely believed to have been intentionally inflicted. Dartmouth cut athletic ties with Princeton for several years (BECAUSE OF THIS EVENT? ) . This was all during Woodrow Wilson's presidency at Princeton there and his investment in segregational practices in the school (I DON'T UNDERSTAND THIS SETENCE - DO YOU MEAN THAT WILSON PROMOTED SEGREGATION AT THE SCHOOL?) . Bullock was not named an All-American despite qualifying. His senior year he was also a member Palaeopity Senior Society as a distinguished individual, other by-invitation boards and committees, and was the associate editor of The Aegis. (IS THIS REALTED TO FOOTBALL? I DON'T KNOW WHAT THIS SOCIETY IS)

Bullock joined the track and field team where he placed 2nd in the high jump during his first year and sophomore year he won first place in the broad jump

previous version: (italics means I have edited those paragraphs above)

Bullock was to start at Dartmouth College in 1901. His father gave Matthew $50 of family savings to start paying tuition,(over $1300 in 2021 dollars,) and started him at Dartmouth College. Bullock raised additional funds in part with his singing, and other various side jobs. He entered Dartmouth in the fall and was elected to the Glee Club for his singing, and served on the track team for all four years. His sister Martha died in October and his brother Joseph married.

Bullock was the first African American to play football at Dartmouth but never saw a game the first year, the single and first black football player at Dartmouth. That year he placed 2nd in the high jump at a meet. The second year he started as a defensive end on the football team, and played well. Sophomore year he won first place in the broad jump and had success in football. That year Bullock sang as a baritone soloist at a Vermont Church in April, 1903. He had further success in his junior year, though he only played the first six games.

In his senior year Bullock was on the varsity football team and achieved national recognition. He was part of the Dartmouth football team that defeated Harvard at the dedication event of the Dartmouth stadium in later 1903. A picture of Bullock was printed in a November issue of the Boston Post at the age of 22. A week later Bullock was refused accommodations during a game at Princeton University and also called out during the game; events that were covered in newspapers in various states across the nation. He broke a collarbone in the first play of this third game of the year in this Princeton game and it was widely believed he had been targeted. Dartmouth cut athletic ties with Princeton for several years. This was all during Woodrow Wilson's presidency at Princeton there and his investment in segregational practices in the school. However Bullock was not named an All-American despite qualifying. His senior year he was also a member Palaeopity Senior Society as a distinguished individual, other by-invitation boards and committees, and was the associate editor of The Aegis.

Bullock graduated in 1904, with a Bachelor of Arts degree and scholastic and athletic distinctions, but only honorable mention in Walter Camp's All-American football listing for 1904. Sports commentator and NAACP leader Edwin Henderson in 1939 observed of Bullock's performance in 1901-3 "Why Bullock did not receive All-American selection has never been understood. Bullock was one of the brainiest men of football ability the game has ever had.” Indeed Bullock released his own list of All-American footballers in 1911.

HARVARD LAW (SEPARATE SUB-HEADING)

Bullock then attended Harvard Law School 1904-1907 ultimately earning an LLB degree while James Barr Ames was Dean of the school. Along the way he paid is tuition by coaching football. He soon coached for the Massachusetts Agricultural and Mechanical College (now University of Massachusetts at Amherst) starting in the fall of 1904 and was credited with the comment "the outlook is the most encouraging in years" in the school newspaper. By that winter it said it "has been without doubt the most successful (season) in the history of the college” credited to Bullock after defeating 5 larger institutions and play in the championship bout and the team presented Bullock with an inscribed watch fob and charm. He was the first black football coach of an integrated college team and had a winning record, and was one of a handful of African-American football figures in the eastern white colleges. He then coached at Malden High School in 1905, as its first black football coach and was presented with a bonus for his improvement of the team in the year. They were undefeated early in 1906-7 school year.

Bullock finished at Harvard in the summer of 1907, with a Bachelor of Law degree studied at Cornell University, and returned to Agriculture & Mechanics College where he was set to coach more seasons. There was also a report he was heading out to Oklahoma to practice law. However by early 1909 he was in the South. That May his father died while the family was living on Winter Street.