Jump to content

User:Mhdav9/Camden Snow Bowl/Caroliner6 Peer Review

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

Mhdav9

Link to draft you're reviewing: Draft Reviewed
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Current Version

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

I really enjoyed reading your article and learning more about the Camden Snow Bowl! I copy-edited the content and made direct revisions for any grammatical errors or typos I came across. Below I included comments on each section, following the peer-review template from WikiEdu.

Lead:

  • Since you added a section about the Winterfest in the content of the article, the Lead could include a slight introduction to describe that major new section.
  • The few sentenes that describe how the ocean can be seen by the ski area has the potential to be moved to the Ski Area major section later in the article.

Content:

  • The content of the article is informative and the tone is neutral. While the overall article is balanced, the History section feels shorter than the rest. If there are any additional notable moments in history from its opening until now, this could be one area of expansion.
  • In the Winterfest section, there are quotes in the paragraph. Since “potato races on ice” seems pretty specific to the activity being described, I don’t know if the quoted words need to be rewritten so the article doesn’t have quotations. However, there should be a citation.

Sources and References:

  • I do not see in text-citations included throughout the paragraphs of the article.

Overall, I thought the article was well written as well as organized, and the content added to the quality of the article.