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"Article Evaluation" [[1]]

There are a couple of grammatical errors found in the first paragraph, mostly commas errors and run on sentences that could be broken up into two. Another grammatical issue comes to light in the first paragraph under 'Views'; the subject of the sentence becomes blurry when speaking between Mencius and Xunzi. Therefore, making it hard to understand who has what viewpoint.

In the second paragraph, under the header 'Life', it might be necessary to add a citation saying where the information came. At the moment, it is making claims, yet it is unclear where or if those are substantiated.

Most of the article is clear and concise, the only out of place statement comes in the third to last paragraph of the article. The sentence beginning with 'Educated in the state of Qi...", it might do better in the above section ('Life'). It also could be broken up to speak more about what proponents of "Legalism" Xunzi taught. It seems to refer mostly to people and not view points.

Overall the article is clear, but that is also due to little information known about Xunzi. Only a few sentences could use with some rewording. The grammar, verb tense, commas, fragments, run-ons, and more, are all present in this article. Yet, this article is constantly be worked on in the 'talk' section with changes being made to information. The links and references are reliable for this article, as they too have been worked on in the 'talk' section.