User:PeaBrainC/GA Review Notes

Hemothorax

Infobox

Speciality - Emergency medicine. Should be Respiratory Medicine or pulmonology if we're going for a US style

Complications - ...hemothorax. Can't be a complication of itself, surely?

Prognosis - usually good. Needs to be more specific

Lead

The term is from hemo- + thorax. - explain

Symptoms include chest pain, difficulty breathing, and rapid breathing. Probably doesn't need rapid breathing as well.

If treated, prognosis is usually good, even it complications arise. Even if... and should be more specific

Signs and symptoms

Try to avoid bullet lists if the text can be expressed in prose form

Causes

Not sure if the categorisation into traumatic and non-traumatic is really working. How about further mention of other iatrogenic causes such as following pacemaker implantation, or chest drain insertion.

Spontaneous hemothorax or hemopneumothorax may be occur with endometriosis, if endometrial tissue implants on the pleural surface, then bleeds in response to cyclical hormonal changes in menstruating women. May be occur? Explain what endometriosis is first

Mechanism

...are separated by a thin layer serous fluid. …thin layer of...

...resulting in dypsnea and tachypnea. Misspelt. Try to use non-technical terms. "shortness of breath" is better than dyspnoea.

Management

Need to mention fluid resuscitation +/- transfusion.

Surgery - citation needed

Prognosis

Needs to be more specific. Citations needed.

Complications

Need to mention shock.

Usually they can be treated too. How?

Images

It feels like the gallery contains too many similar CXR images. What is the image of a hemothorax in an animal? What species?

Wikilinks

Overlinking. Remove duplicate links to chest tube, tube thoracostomy, empyema, dyspnoea

References

Mainly appropriate secondary sources. #3 and #4 are primary and should be removed. I don't think that #13 is the best - surely better peer-reviewed review articles are out there?

Christian Medical College, Ludhiana

Christian Medical College, Ludhiana

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