User:RSchaul
Article Critique
[edit]I took German in high school and through those classes I not only learned about the language, but also about the culture. I thought it would be interesting to learn about the food aspect of Germany's culture. I visited the Berliner (Doughnut) page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: The Kennedy Legend, the names in different regions, and the lack of citations.
The Kennedy Legend
[edit]In the article, the author states that the difference between "Ich bin ein Berliner" and "Ich bin Berliner" is almost nothing at all. The German language removes the use of definite when stating their national origin, occupation, etc. Grammatically yes, the use of an indefinite article would make a difference and does not change the meaning slightly. Languages translate differently and have different phrasings that are grammatically correct.
Various Names
[edit]A wide variety of names are given with explanations from the different countries or other parts of Germany. The article also provides extensive information from where the names of the doughnut are derived from. Though there appears extensive to be research, there doesn't seem to be any citations to back up the claims. It would be nice to see them back up the claims they are making with the regions and the roots of the names they are providing.
Citations
[edit]Overall, there is a general lack of citations. They don't have much to back up how they think the doughnuts are prepared. Someone had already added a needed citation marker for the preparation process. It would also be nicer to see some better citations on the "Ich bin ein Berliner" situation. They don't have much of a true grammatical backup from the German language of the claim they made.
Summary
[edit]In the end, I would rate this article as "not bad". It provides the reader with some interesting information, it just needs better citations to back up its claims. Overall, the author had good intentions and did a relatively good job.
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[edit]My name is Ryland and I am a college student from Washington state. I have spent my whole life here in the Puget Sound area and love the atmosphere and beautiful scenery! Being able to grow up here was amazing and I wouldn't want to be anywhere else.
In my free time, I enjoy playing video games and practicing my music. Ever since I was a little girl, video games have been a part of my life. I have clocked in an absurd amount of hours into Runescape during my childhood. Music has been a big part or my life since I started band in the sixth grade, and I don't plan on stopping any time soon.