User:SparkyBava
Bio
[edit]I am what you would call a Jack of all Traits, good at everything but simultaneously great at nothing. While I would love to call myself an Electrical Engineer, sadly, collage takes time. I gained an interest in electrical engineering early in my childhood. this was due to older home consoles for videogames could be easily opened up with just a screwdriver and some time. upon opening my first home console, a PS 2, I found all the circuits, sensors, and motors interesting. time went on and then I learned about VEX robotics. through this program I learned about robotic programing and mechanical designs. While this didn't fully satisfy my longing to know more about how the actual circus worked, I was thoroughly entertained. Eventually I was enrolled in an electrical engineering class where I learned many things about circuits to the components they contain. and that brought me to where I am academically, getting a degree in Mechatronics.
Mostly, I like to spend my free time engaging in high paced FPS video games. I started out with simpler games such as Halo:3. slowly as time went on I branched out to more than just the halo franchise. Now days I am actively involved in many gaming communities. While I do spend many hours in these games I still am very far from being a professional gamer. the joy in gaming for me comes not from the guns, and virtual killing, but form the friends that join me, the silly strategies, and overall positive communities that also share the same servers as me.
Article Critique
[edit]I visited the "TheFatRat" page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: the lack of substance in the main Music Career paragraph, various aesthetic formatting problems, and lastly the dead link. When looking at the page of this artist you are greeted by a very brief introduction of the Artist. This first section is fulfilling enough to get the reader enough knowledge as to not be clueless for the rest of the article. The following section is titled Music Career and tries to explain just that. At first glance the section may seem reasonable in size and length but fails to go in-depth about the stages of advancement and achievement of said career, but rather gives small snippets of various events more akin to a timeline than an article meaning to give true detail of events. The paragraph seemingly fails to include any information on the partnership of TheFatRat and Spinnin’ Records. Secondly, thorough the article there are times in which there could be changes to grammar and formatting as to better please the aesthetic side of the readers mind. Examples of these slight errors are seen in the formatting of the date of birth “(born 1 June 1979)” could be changed to “(Born June 1, 1979)”. This formatting may just be made due to the culture in which the editor of this segment was raised as different places use different formats. Also, throughout the article not a single song or extended play record is linked to that of another article or to an outside site, Ex. YouTube, Soundcloud, etc. Lastly, in the citation of the article lies a permanent dead link. The link is meant to take you the Spinnin’ Records page of YouTube. Further examination reviled the link has been dead since June 2018. While not the biggest upset in human history enough time has passed to the point in which the dead link issue should have been resolved to lead to the proper webpage
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