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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

TayG1201

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TayG1201/Meal_kit?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Meal kit

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Overall:
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The introduction's very last paragraph should be reworded about the review of a meal kit.

Section Meal Kit User Experience could use more content add a couple paragraphs. Nutritional Value research could also use more content within each paragraph. Maybe two sentences per each paragraph

Putting the section "Cost" as the last section and "List of Notable Meal Kit Services" second to last could be a better flow for the article.

Sources look good! Maybe you could update the "List of Notable Meal Kit Services" page!

Lead:
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I think the Lead section could use some editing. There seems to be some stuff that could work in their own section.

Content:
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All the content is drafted well! Just adding some more content into the shorter paragraphs maybe.

Tone and Balance:
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This was great! No comments here.

Sources:
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There were good lists of sources, could add more for the sections you are working on.

Organization:
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I think some sections could be changed in regards to the order. See overall comments for specifics.