User:YuuMiura
I visited the Harry Potter page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: anything is left out of the article should be there, each fact is cited with an appropriate or reliable source, and there are heavily biased claims or language.
First, I found that an important thing is not in the article; It is friendship. According to "A series of many genres, including fantasy, drama, coming of age and the British school story (which includes elements of mystery, thriller, adventure, horror and romance), the world of Harry Potter explores numerous themes and includes many cultural meanings and references" in the article of Harry Potter page, there is not about friendship. The main character is Harry Potter, but there are other main characters who is Hermione Granger and Ron Weasley since the first series of Harry Potter, also. This each story is that they are fighting for challenges, adversaries, and some problems together until the final series. Also, we can learn how the friend is important in our daily life, so friendship is necessary and should be in the article indeed.
Second, I realized that there is a source, which does not has a relation; it is derivative works in "The success of the books and films has ensured that the Harry Potter franchise continues to expand, with numerous derivative works". When I clicked the "Derivative works", the page showed only the series of Harry Potte, not works. Also, as you know, there are examples of works in the sentence, so the source does not need.
Finally, I figured out that there is heavily biased claims or language. According to "The series has also had its share of criticism, including concern about the increasingly dark tone as the series progressed, as well as the often gruesome and graphic violence it depicts", this sentence is an overstatement as the very famous story all over the world. It is true that there are some judgments for the story, but the story has more good impressions than that. In addition, it is giving a lot of effect on business such as entertainments, amusement parks, and something like that, not only readers.
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