User talk:AJS1998
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:35, 6 September 2019 (UTC)
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[edit]Hey!
Here are a couple of recommendations that I have from reading your article:
I would edit the lead paragraph to include the clinical significance of the longitudinal fissure. Nothing is really mentioned about the clinical significance until you reach the end of the article. Try to incorporate it into the lead paragraph rather than just tacking it to the end of the article.
"Without the presence of longitudinal fissure, the corpus callosotomy procedure would be significantly more challenging and dangerous, as it would require the surgeon to navigate through densely connected cortical areas."--This statement appears to be opinion based rather than factual based as it is not cited and stating that something is "more challenging and dangerous" is individual opinion. What is challenging for one person may not be challenging for another.
Your sources appear reputable. I tried to click on a couple of the sources, but source 2 says the access is restricted.
I would also modify the order of the pictures, so they appear in the sections of the article that they represent rather than having the majority of them at the end.
Good start! Jhelbing (talk) 19:19, 24 October 2019 (UTC)J. Helbing