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Peer Review Comments: The "Contents" structure is good and the order of the topics flows well. || Intro: "Several characteristics in particular make nano particles strong candidates as a traditional antibiotic drug alternative" this line sounds a little biased... consider rewording. At the end, I would use a different word instead of "functionalizations"- unless the reader is involved in science/medicine, they probably won't know what that means. || Metal nanoparticles: very good section with a thorough explanation and strong use of citations. No changes!|| Carbon structures: explain what fullerenes are. Explain what doping is. In sentence 5, it should be believed instead of believe. "Unknown potential hazards" sounds confusing... consider rewording. Good content overall!|| Drug synergies: In sentence 3, explain what antimicrobial effects are or link to the page. In sentence 4, functionalized is misspelled, but I would consider using a different word or phrase that provides more explanation.|| Overall, very good article additions! The writing is very technical and that's the only issue I really had, is that for an average reader some of this may be hard to understand so you may want to consider rewording some parts to be more easily understood by people who aren't technically versed in medicinal or chemistry terminology. Otherwise great and interesting! Ernst.ch (talk) 03:02, 27 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lots of good work. I found it a little hard to understand a lot of the technical terminology, so you could even more links to other Wikipedia articles that explain some of the parts and words. Also consider explaining how the sections Metal Nanoparticles and Carbon Structures relates to Antibiotic Properties of Nanoparticles overall. From just reading it I didn't really understand how they all connect. adding References section for you. Good job - I learned some things while reading this. Jayshome (talk) 16:44, 9 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]