User talk:Aekong2011/sandbox
Whitney Misters - You should include headings according to the rubric - The abstract is good, but more organization of the information would make it easier to read - Missing mechanism section - The symptoms are informational, you can include links on the words that are not common knowledge - Mabey include more on the areas of the body affected - Missing Diagnosis section - Mabey look on google scholar or academic search premier for Treatment and Prognosis section - The recent research and references section needs separation its confusing when put all together
Peer Review[edit]
Wajdey Nesheiwat
Abstract: Looks like you hit some of the key points in this section. Be sure to be concise. Make sure to use headings for all sections. (I think you may have edited this under source edit instead of regular edit).
Mechanism: I like how you included specifically what happens in this autosomal dominant disorder. Don’t forget to cite some of the words back to wiki since it may seem too complex for the audience.
Symptoms: You gave a great summary on the symptoms. Perhaps also talk about how the other areas of the body are affected by the symptoms.
Diagnosis: I did not see this portion in the sandbox
Causes and Prevention: I like how you talked about the different isoforms of FGFR2. Maybe go into more detail with it.
Treatment & Prognosis: What is LeFort III? Also, did not see a prognosis for this under the treatment section. This kind of surgery sounds very interesting!
Recent Research: Did not see any recent research, but be sure to talk about this! It’s a good start.
I think the first thing you should do is create the different sections (click the "paragraph" tab and select "heading"), it will become a lot easier to read and edit when you work on it again. A couple of the sections are missing, but the ones you do have, have some really good information. Throughout the whole page you need to add more "links" to other wiki pages. In the symptoms sections, you should be able to find a link for most of those symptoms. Everything under "(EDIT SOURCE)" seems to be all over the place, make sure to put that information in the proper sections. Overall I think you have a lot of information, that needs to be expanded on. Good start to the page.
(Pdesai93 (talk) 16:45, 14 November 2017 (UTC))
- It looks like in your initial copying, you did not copy from source, which lead to failure of formatting. Right now this is not formatted at all. I recommend that you recopy from source for a start and add back in any additions after.
- Should not have disease title at top above text.
- Make sure you are spelling the disease consistently.
- It looks like you copied, but did not integrate. Right now this really isn't an appropriate rough draft, and I don't feel like I can comment it effectively.