User talk:Alex waterbury/sandbox

Alex's Section- It looks very good, although it looks a bit long; what is the word count? Also, his name is misspelled. It is Moïse, not #Möise. Looks great though! Deriede (talk) 23:21, 21 April 2017 (UTC) Gabby's section- Looks good, sources appear to be in the right places. Just a side note though, I thought you were doing his early life? Was there not enough information? also, there need to be links to the other relevant pages in the section. You can do this by placing before and after to link it, like this: Hyacinthe Moïse. Great stuff though, it looks like we are going to get a good grade! Deriede (talk) 23:25, 21 April 2017 (UTC) Zeke's section- still isn't uploaded, so I can't comment on it. Deriede (talk) 23:25, 21 April 2017 (UTC)

Gwalke12 (talk) 03:03, 22 April 2017 (UTC) : I couldn't find much about his early life that was peer reviewed. everything was either a website or a book. the articles i found that were peer reviewed didn't touch on his early life. alex: looks good. you have a lot of information, but just remember to add sources. colt: your section looks good too, but I'm not sure about the website you linked and whether it'll be accepted.

Alex- The overview is very long for an overview. We need to go through and see what overlaps it later in the article and take it out of the overview. The second paragraph of his role in the revolution is good. But I felt like i was reading Moïse's name every other word. It may just be me, but if anyone agrees I think we should include a he, or him every now and then. Other than that I think everything else looks good. Aside from Zeke's part. That needs a little work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Alex waterbury (talk • contribs) 18:40, 24 April 2017 (UTC)