User talk:Artful inquiry/sandbox/LowellStateCollege

Hi Artful inquiry, here's some feedback for the content in your sandbox (mostly related to that Wikipedia Manual of Style!):

• You'll want to bold "Lowell State College" on its very first usage. Just a standard convention for Wikipedia policies that the subject of the article is bolded in the first sentence
• Also related to Wikipedia style, you'll want to drag and drop your references so that they come directly after your punctuation, not before. So it should be sentence, period, reference, space, sentence.
• References shouldn't go in section titles, but rather directly after the content they support.
• Another very small thing: Wikipedia prefers "1930s" (no apostrophe) to "1930's"
• Great job adding some redlinks to missing encyclopedia articles!
• You'll want to add a reference to the end of these paragraph to let readers know where this information came from. In general, Wikipedians don't like to see a section or a paragraph end without a citation
  • In 1938, in order to balance budgets state legislators considered a suggestion to close several normal schools. School administrators rallied local support to help keep it open. A delegation of prominent individuals representing Lowell's powerful interest groups traveled to Boston and convinced state officials of the school's importance. The result was that the school not only survived but continued to grow and expand.
  • As the demand for more qualified teachers grew, the legislature reorganized the Normal School into Lowell State College in 1960 with a curriculum that expanded beyond education to include baccalaureate degrees in other fields including nursing and music. Beginning in 1967, the college was authorized to confer two graduate degrees: Master of Education and Master of Music Education.
  • In 1950, Dr. Daniel O'Leary assumed the presidency and initiated an ambitious building program. The physical plant of the campus expanded during post-war era from a single structure to a multi-building complex, forming an area now known as UMass Lowell's South Campus.The dedication of several buildings named for each of the school's six presidents was held on June 9, 1974. These buildings were built in the style of brutalism.
  • No references yet in the "Merger" section