User talk:Atlas851997/Video game crash of 1983

Things to work on for your Week 9 continued edits:

Evaluate an article: Go back to your article evaluation and pull out the list of things you said you could improve on the existing article. Put that list here in the talk page and cross things off as you do them (you can also edit what I have said below and cross things off as you complete them).
Copyedits: I recommend going back and seeing what you actually did in your copyedits and republishing the changes in your sandbox (make a small edit and reverse it) with explicit notes on what you changed from the original Wikipedia article. That way when you migrate your work to live Wikipedia you will be able to publish and explain each change as you go. Doing so is a required part of the Week 13 Wikipedia assignment.
Bibliography: You need to expand your bibliography. You currently only have 3 sources, and only one is a peer-reviewed academic source (I've sent you more previously, and I or Kristina DeVoe can help you find more if you set up a meeting with either of us).
Citing sources: What you have done thus far is good, but you need to add more and also make sure it is clear where in the existing Wikipedia article your additions will go. You also need to add citations to academic sources.
Adding media/hyperlinks: You added needed hyperlinks, but as you continue you should go through and see if there are things that should be hyperlinked in whatever you add and the existing article. The image you added is fine, but be sure before you add media to the live Wikipedia article that it is actually necessary or contributes to the article (that is, you had to do it for this assignment, but in your final Wikipedia contributions don't add it just to add it).
Overall: You seem to be doing things week by week, but now you really need to focus on the bigger picture of what you plan to add/edit here. Is there more in the existing article that needs copyediting? More citations you can use to expand on the sections you said were out of date or needed to be developed more? The more planning you can do now the easier it will be for you to chip away at those edits between now and November 22 when you need to move your final edits to live Wikipedia.

Adrishaw (talk) 16:32, 21 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sydney Notes:

I want to possibly add more to the Long term effects section
The first paragraph of the article is pretty short. I want to try and make that a bit longer.
I want to add more hyperlinks and pictures to the side of the article
The article itself is pretty on point with the research I've done so there isn't much to add there. But I want to read through it a couple of times and fix some grammar mistakes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Atlas851997 (talk • contribs) 15:10, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Week 12 feedback: You added some sources but are not yet using them to cite specific additions you have made. The Paola and Wolf are good additions, but it is unclear what this citation is: Wardyga, Brian (2018). Author. New York: A K Peters/ CRC Press. p. 113. ISBN 9781351172363. Once you add content from those sources, however, you should be good to go re: moving your work to live Wikipedia. Adrishaw (talk) 21:55, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]