User talk:Bhkwp
March 2021
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First Paragraph of "Kalasin"
[edit]Currently, the first paragraph of "Kalasin" reads as follows:
Kalasin (Thai: กาฬสินธุ์) is a town (thesaban mueang) in northeast Thailand, the capital of Kalasin Province.[2] As of 2015, it has a population of 34,429[1] It covers the whole tambon Kalasin of the Mueang Kalasin District, an area of 16.96 km2 (6.55 sq mi). Kalasin lies 513 kilometres (319 mi) north-northeast of Bangkok by road.
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the capital --> and the capital
it has a --> it had a
kilometres --> kilometers
Delete or rewrite "in a bidding war [to]" in the introductory paragraph
[edit]The current sentence:
Cline sold the rights to publish the novel in June 2010, in a bidding war to the Crown Publishing Group (a division of Random House).[1]
The suggested revision:
Cline sold the rights to publish the novel in June 2010 to the Crown Publishing Group (a division of Random House).[1]
discussed --> argued
[edit]ORIGINAL
As a doctoral student in 1984, Navarro wrote a book entitled The Policy Game: How Special Interests and Ideologues are Stealing America, which discussed that special interest groups had led the United States to "a point in its history where it cannot grow and prosper."
RECOMMENDED CHANGE
As a doctoral student in 1984, Navarro wrote a book TITLED The Policy Game: How Special Interests and Ideologues are Stealing America, which ARGUED that special interest groups had led the United States to "a point in its history where it cannot grow and prosper."