User talk:Buffy0123

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Hello, Buffy0123, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:33, 23 October 2019 (UTC)

Response

Hi! I wanted to reply on your talk page. I marked the page with that because it had the following issues:

• The page needs sourcing - there are many things on the page that lack an in-line citation that shows where the material was pulled from. This contributes to the issue of original research, since it comes across as something that we came up with on our own as opposed to summarizing what was stated in the sources.

• There are some statements that are written from a specific point of view, such as the passage below:

This is a very strong take on linguistic relativism, literally making language the "prison" that our minds are trapped in. According to Nietzsche we could not comprehend things like table, or rain without the words being present in our language.

Point of view statements such as "very strong" is original research since it's us adding our own opinions to the page as opposed to adding something that an authority stated in the source. The reason for this is that when we write from our own point of view, it comes across as being in Wikipedia's voice - ie, a definitive statement. The only time we should write this is when it's a very widely held statement and even then, it has to be extremely carefully phrased and attributed.

• Something else to be careful of is to avoid using "we" and "our" in the writing, as Wikipedia uses the third person style. It also comes across as being written by a specific person and presumes something of the reader. See this for more information on that end. This also comes across as very casual, which should be avoided.

I hope that this helps explain the tags! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:37, 5 December 2019 (UTC)