User talk:Bzare011

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Hello, Bzare011, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:16, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

Your draft

I returned your draft to your sandbox because it wasn't ready for mainspace - it's now back at User:Bzare011/User:Bzare011/New sandbox. Some things you need to do before you move it live

• Your lead section is currently blank. The opening sentence should start with something like Virtual reality in nursing education involves... or The use of virtual reality in nursing education is..., and give the reader enough information that if they didn't read anything else the would still have an idea of the topic. The rest of the lead should summarize all the major points of the article in proportion to how those things are covered in the body of the article.
• You should only cover the topic at hand. Things like nursing education are covered in their own articles. Link to them, but don't include any detail beyond the bare minimum the average reader would need to keep going in this article.
• Be conscious of tone. An encyclopaedia article should have a fairly neutral tone, it shouldn't be promotional or exciting. Something like Nursing is a rapidly evolving profession that requires highly specialized and trained individuals misses that goal - it's too promotional for Wikipedia.
• Keep your quotes short and focused. Only use quotes when the precise wording significantly improves the reader's understanding, and try to keep them short - under five words is best except in exceptional circumstances. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:31, 2 December 2021 (UTC)