User talk:Caleb Lin
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page.CAPTAIN RAJU (✉) 00:15, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
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Hello, Caleb Lin, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:10, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review[edit]
Hi Caleb! Here is my review of your article and what I think you did really well on, as well as what I think you need to improve:
1. What the article does well: Your article makes a very clear contrast between ion transporters and ion channels in the first and opening paragraph. The order of your sections later on, when the article describes primary and secondary channels, makes very plain sense to me. I also liked how you clearly distinguished between ATP utilizing and ATP producing transporters. I also thought that for the most part you did well citing what you had posted. Our biochemistry textbook is a very useful tool in helping with articles like this.
2.What changes I would make to the article: I think that although the article is well structured, and there is good information on what is there, there is a lot of information that you can add to the article. For example, you mention the sodium potassium pump once, and very briefly. This is one of the most vital pumps in the human nervous system and it allows our brains to communicate with the rest of our body through action potentials. This is a pretty important aspect of biology and it is barely touched on. I think you could elaborate more on how these ion transporters are both enzymes and that they physically move ions from one side of the membrane to another. There is also only a brief mention of ATP Synthase in the ion transport chain, which is another enzyme really vital to life.
3. What is the most important thing you can do to improve this article: Really the only place where this article could improve is in adding some biological meaning to it besides simply the biochemistry, and going into a little more depth overall.
4. How does this help with my own article: I can certainly take some of the diving deeper information and apply it to my own article. I think maybe I will find some more specific examples of how one might use the molecule I wrote about in their own body.
I hope this helps bud! Best, Jacob Shalkevich
I will attach some links at the bottom of this post where you will be able to find more information. http://jeb.biologists.org/content/jexbio/172/1/431.full.pdf http://www.cvphysiology.com/Arrhythmias/A007b http://webspace.ship.edu/cgboer/actionpot.html http://www.rcsb.org/pdb/explore/explore.do?structureId=4XE5 — Preceding unsigned comment added by JacobShalk (talk • contribs) 01:41, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review Done by Jessica Reyes[edit]
The overall flow of your article was smooth and easy to follow. Some areas of clarity need improvement and I have noted those areas bellow:
The first section Ion transporter:
• This section does a very good job of walking the reader through the information and slowly introducing the terms and topic.
• However, the sentence following where the ion channels are introduced is a little confusing to a reader that does not know anything about the subject. I had to reread it to see if you were still talking about the channels or the ion transporter. Maybe this can be fixed by rearranging the paragraph or by being more explicit it the transition back to the main topic.
• I also went ahead a further linked a few things for readers that want to know more about the purpose of the ion transporter
• Maybe the term “electrochemical gradient” can be lightly explained so the reader can further understand the main purpose of the ion transporter
Primary Transport:
• The section is very simple and to the point which in turns gives a lot of clarity to a reader like me that does not know much about subject
• A picture in this section or even in the first section would do this article justice in order to show what you are describing
ATP Utilizing:
• In this section I realize that the article continues to mention potential energy in the form of some type of concentration gradient, but nowhere in the article does it give a short description of summary of what this is or how it is used as potential energy o I do see you say it moves things from low concentration to high but this does not tell me how this is used and potential energy? Secondary Transport:
• This section, in my opinion, was the easiest to follow and need the least changes if you explain the concentration gradient and potential energy in the earlier sections
Jasper94574 (talk) 20:11, 7 March 2017 (UTC)