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Critique of "Mixotroph" Wikipedia Article

This article, overall, gives an accurate and detailed description of mixotrophy with examples that help give a clear demonstration of mixotrophic organisms in the environment. In a few cases, such as the last sentences of the introductory section that addresses the Calvin cycle, the article brings up details or introduces broader topics that I don't believe are necessary in understanding the basic elements of mixotrophy. Along these lines, the "Types of Mixotrophy" section could have been shortened as I believe it begins to over-explain the topic. As well, the "Examples" section should be put last in the article and changed to simply introduce more hyperlinks as opposed to including a paragraph long explanation of Paracoccus pantotrophus. As the explaining of this topic must involve terminology from other elements of biology, there are lots of hyperlinks that lead to the appropriate wiki articles. Finally, the reference list contains many great sources such as scientific journals and academic papers that ensure the reliability of information within the Mixotrophy article.

Camc01 (talk) 02:22, 14 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Assignment 2[edit]

I have chosen the Wikipedia article on Lithotrophs as it is a frequently addressed topic in many areas of Microbiology that has many reliable references that make good sources of information. Presently, the article has a good base of information and topics from which to build upon; specifically, the section I will be addressing is ‘Overview of the Metabolic Process’. In this section of the article, comparison to other processes is used to help explain the various components of metabolism utilized in Lithotrophic organisms. While these comparisons are useful in helping understand the basis of the biochemistry, I think adding more specifics would help provide a deeper understanding of why lithotrophs are unique. This would also make sense as, in the article, this section is put as a subtopic under ‘Biochemistry’. As Lithotrophs encompass a large and diverse group of bacteria, many examples of these bacteria are used throughout the article but not much in this section. I think, that by using one or two organisms as an example, it would help to go through the biochemistry in relation to their Electron Transport System and/or Metabolic pathways. By starting with a compound or element uniquely or mainly used by lithotrophs, and then describing how it is utilized as well as the result in specific examples of organisms, more specialized knowledge is given about lithotrophs that can’t be achieved by simply listing chemical reactions or giving definitions. I would also try and use examples of organisms that live in different environments so that the diversity of lithotrophs is also demonstrated. Lastly, all these edits will hopefully help in improving this article as it is given mid- to high-importance by various WikiProjects. It has also been rated ‘start-class’ which means it as many areas which can be improved on and the good amount of literature coverage given in the reference section provides plenty of information to help make this a better edition to Wikipedia Camc01 (talk) 20:23, 23 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Cameron's Peer Review[edit]

Structure and placement: The content added is well placed because it matches the topic of the paragraph. As I read the edited article I couldn’t identify which part was added and the article as a whole was well-structured and flowed well.

Content: The sentence “Sulfur is one of many inorganic substrates yet it is...” should be revised to “Sulfur is one of many inorganic substrates that can be utilized in different reduced forms depending on the specific biochemical process that a lithotroph uses.”

The sentence “The high electronegativity of oxygen makes it ideal for use as a Terminal Electron Acceptor (TEA), also resulting in large energy gains.” should be revised to “The high electronegativity of oxygen and resulting large energy gains makes it ideal for use as a Terminal Electron Acceptor (TEA).”

You may want to expand the article by adding a short summary of how chemolithotrophs obtain reducing power from inorganic substrate and reverse electron transport.

Sources: The source Paustian, Timothy. "Lithotrophic Bacteria - Rock Eaters". Lecturer. University of Wisconsin-Madison. Retrieved 6 October 2017. is not a reliable source since it is a self-published website in which the content has not been peer-reviewed.

Writing style and tone: Since the writing is not biased and there is not too much jargon used, I think that the writing style and tone of the added material is appropriate. Agatha Lo (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your peer review; I have revised my article while consulting your revisions. Camc01 (talk) 19:13, 19 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]