User talk:Chris18.07/sandbox

This is a well written article! Some suggestions: I agree that the first paragraph's content will mainly be covered in the overall article about Toronto. In your section titled: Status and Second-Generation Language Maintenance, some of the statistics, particularly the study conducted by Young Gon Kim should be cited. The picture is really good! Andrewtsalmon (talk) 01:14, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Nice draft, Christina. A few suggestions & comments:

First para, about Toronto, is unnecessary. Rather, you should link to the Toronto entry in Wikipedia. Also keep in mind that this will be part of a bigger article where Toronto is already introduced. You could put info from your 1st paragraph into that intro to the larger article, if you have some that isn't already there.

Great photo!

I don't think the final version of wikipedia articles say things like "It's unfortunate that we can't find stats on..." Rather, you just have to work around that. But try Statistics Canada's 2011 census data. I think you'll find what you are looking for.

It will be helpful to provide links to the various resources (institutional supports, for ex.) directly in the text. Interested readers can then do things like check the class schedule at the YMCA, etc.

Some of the statements you make are not supported by citations. For example: "The use of the Korean language is thus restricted to communication between parents and children." These will need to be removed unless you provide supporting citations. Check through carefully.

Several citations are incomplete. Something looks odd in the authors in this citation. Please check: "McDougall, B. ., & Ontario. (1994)."

Naomi TBB199 (talk) 18:18, 11 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Anikachowdhury (talk) 22:37, 1 March 2016 (UTC)Great organization! I like how you briefly wrote about each institution under Institutional Support. For more engagement,try to find some pictures of the institutions in Toronto. In you first introductory paragraph, you should move the first few sentences in the introduction for our page Heritage Languages in Toronto because its not specific to Korean or you can change it to make it relevant to Korean in Toronto. Majority of your information under Demographics is related to Canada and Ontario broadly, try to find some statistics that are specific to Toronto, if you go on the city's website you may be able to find some stats there. If information is lacking there, maybe try looking at University of Toronto itself and find demographics of Korean students in Toronto with regards to the Heritage Language. I have added a few sentences here and there to help with the flow other than that, great job on the article![reply]