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@CollPaulie: This isn't ready yet.

• You need a lead section that summarizes all the major points of the article. See pages 7-9 of the Editing Wikipedia brochure.
• Bullet points need to be used sparingly. The Medical uses and Procedure/Technique sections need to be converted to prose.
• There are no references in the body of the article. References should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph.
• Two of your listed references date to 1996. Is the information in these articles still current? I would expect that a lot of this technology has changed in the last 20 years. Even if it hasn't, you should use more recent sources - there's no way to know, from these articles, what has happened since 1996. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:57, 31 March 2017 (UTC)