User talk:Dharmeep/sandbox

Comments on Bibliography

Dharmee: Good job. You might consider adding the Poole and Muiznieks articles to your list. Also, a number of the citations you added to the spreadsheet were duplicates; I have removed them.Njclum (talk) 02:26, 11 November 2016 (UTC)

Comments on Rough Draft

Dharmee. Great job on this. A few suggestions in addition to Brian's review. In the first paragraph, be precise. The species exists in 17 states. There is a difference between endangered and threatened so indicate which state has which designation. Also distinguish special concern from extripated and list all states where there is no designation. I.e., each state's status should be listed. Under threats, I would make a new paragraph for the threat of winter mortality, and move the foragin paragraph up to follow it, since this is largely a food issue. I like the way you've used a parallel construction for conservation steps and threats; I would reorganize this section slightly to continue that. Don't forget to include citations in your text!Njclum (talk) 20:32, 11 December 2016 (UTC)