User talk:Gavinrcoble26

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Hello, Gavinrcoble26, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:23, 14 February 2018 (UTC)

Arrest of Dominic Hall and Louis Louaillier

Hi Gavin,

While doing New Page Patrolling, I found Arrest of Dominic Hall and Louis Louaillier. At the moment, it's not ready for prime time, but I'm hanging back on removing it from the main article space, on the assumption that you'll be able to clean it up quickly.

What you need to do:

• Fix the article's structure:

• Take a look at Arrest of Mark Kaminsky and Harvey Bennett for example. The article has to start out with a proper lead section, with the title in bold, and a clear concise explanation of the topic, and why it's important.
• Break it up into paragraphs at least, and preferably into sections. At the moment, it's a wall of text, and really difficult to follow. You need to give the reader a bit of background (which you do already, but not separately); then explain separately when, where, why, how and by whom they were arrested; then what happened next (trial, sentencing, etc.) and then what the long-term results were.
• Create a section for the references.

• Remove that sandbox template: it's only to be used while the article is still in your sandbox.

I hope this helps - I'll keep an eye out, but if you need more help, you can leave a message on my talk page. --Slashme (talk) 15:56, 29 April 2018 (UTC)