User talk:Griffen.desroches
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Peer Review for Magnesocene[edit]
Overall comments:
- The information is good and presented in an unbiased manner, and the coverage of information is fairly thorough as well.
- Perhaps add an application section, where you can discus applications in magnesium batteries There is definitely stuff to write about in this regards, and it would make it clearer to non-chemistry people why they should care about the molecule.
- All of your citations work.
Introduction:
- A structure of magnesocene in the introduction section would be helpful. A lot of non-chem people know little about either sandwich compounds or cp.
Properties:
- 1st sentence: you mispelled “temperature” (tempurature)
- Why does magnesocene display slight dissociation and subsequent ion association in polar, electron-donating solvents when ferrocene doesn’t?
- Similarly, why does magnesocene decompose while ferrocene doesn’t?
- It’s worth mentioning that if you store it without air/moisture, it’s actually pretty stable. this info is from your first citation.
Synthesis:
- Good presentation, starting with the first reported synthesis and then moving down chronologically.
- Good that you reference the papers which reported the work.
- “Large, colorless single crystals can be obtained by adjusting temperature and flow rate, but the product of this process is typically a white, fluffy mass of fine microcrystals.” The construction of this sentence would make more sense reversed; “If you do this, you get this; if you want crystals, you can do this” makes more sense than if the two clauses were reversed.
Structure and Bonding:
- This section should come before “Properties”. By putting "Structure" in the beginning, it helps people figure out what they're looking at. It also makes sense to keep “Reactivity” and “Synthesis” close together.
- A diagram to show the solid versus gas phase structures would be helpful for visualization.
Explanation of covalent v. ionic arguments could be written more clearly.
Reactivity:
- Could have more reactions.
- Show the structure of CpMgX for laymen.