User talk:Hpepin/sandbox
What are your initial plans for your article? Arrotramel (talk) 13:02, 14 September 2016 (UTC)
Now I am on my talk page. Phew. I wrote some plans on your talk page, but once I have more plans I will continue to update you. Hpepin (talk) 19:56, 14 September 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Hannah- 1.) Somethings about your article that I really liked were the splitting of all the categories ex. biography, career, writings. I also noticed that everything in her career was in chronological order. I also noticed how many sources you have, it showed that you looked though so many sources to find what you wanted (love it). 2.) I have a few questions in the beginning of your article what is this?: First practice sentence with cite:
Woodhouse served as a state Representative from Connecticut, after defeating Horace-Seely Brown in 1948.[1]
Draft (italics already on Wikipedia):
(its probably just notes to yourself but i was just wondering)
Also why is so much italicized? The entire Biography is italicized and much of everything else- why / does everything need to be italicized? (I didn't italicize anything so I'm not sure what needs to be) For Political Career and Education Career does it need to be separated so much? Could you put them kinda together in one big thing called "career" and then put a subtitle? I just got confused while reading because there is a break talking about her writings. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vanessacushing (talk • contribs) 19:50, 5 October 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Biography - Great information on her educational background, but it doesn't state what she eventually applied to her education to. I.E. it would be beneficial to include the occupation which she is best known for (a politician? a political advisor? political figure?). Also mention her nationality (first Canadian, then American) as nationality plays a huge part in politics. Don't assume the reader automatically associated "Congress" with the United States, as other nations have their own "Congress" as well. I would suggest creating a new subheading named "Personal Life" at the very bottom of the page and include her marriage/children there, instead of in her Biography. It just doesn't seem relevant to her role as a politically active woman.
In Political Career - add wiki article links to "Connecticut College", "Connecticut Federation of Women's Clubs", "Auerbach Service Bureau for Connecticut Organizations", "Connecticut Humanities Council", "Banking and Currency Committee ", "Governor's Committee on the Status of Women", "Advisory Committee to the State Department of Community Affairs", "Planned Parenthood ". (Only if possible, though! I know not everything has its own wiki article.)
Nice variation of sources cited throughout the main sections. Possibly include some concrete examples of her political success...any policies she worked to pass, movements she supported, or laws she helped to create? She was a member of all these committees and boards, but possibly include details about what she did while in those positions.
In Writings - Possibly include how her publications were received by the public?
Great use of neutral tone and perspective throughout the text!