User talk:Jhamm2/YergasonsTest
Feedback from Wikipedia Campus Ambassador[edit]
First off: awesome job! Your article is looking great, and I can definitely see the work you've been putting into it. For revision, I suggest the following:
- In your "See Also" section, you use a non-encyclopedic tone. Furthermore, you direct the reader to another article containing the terminology you've used in your article, under the direction that the terms do not have specific pages on Wikipedia. While correct, you can still link to a specific subsection of an article like this: "[[Anatomical_position#Proximal_and_distal|proximal]]". To find the correct link, click on the term in the table of contents box and copy everything after "/wiki/" in your browser's address bar.
- Take a look at your purpose again. It doesn't mention the purpose of the exam, only the specific positive findings. Even though these are part of the purpose, it doesn't read as such.
- Go ahead and link the obscure terms in the mechanism section.
- Please always use complete sentences! (Specifically in the Adverse Effects section)
Please keep up the great work! Things are looking really, really good. Don't hesitate to reach out to your other classmates for feedback as well! Dylanstaley (talk) 04:13, 28 March 2011 (UTC)