User talk:Jjame67/sandbox

Sources

You only have one source so far. Also be sure to provide an actual MLA citation rather than a link to a database article - most WP readers wouldn't be able to access the link anyway. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:35, 21 February 2016 (UTC)

The article you've chosen to work on is an important one, but it's not well developed, which means that you'll have to add some writing to it. A sentence or two for each of your sources should do.

Your second source raises an important issue, but I'm not sure it's the best source for that issue. Rather than a personal testimony, it would be better to find a source that treats the issue more comprehensively. But if this is the best you can find, you should use it. The issue fits into the article, and hopefully other editors will develop it further. Either way, you should go ahead and add your sources to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 15:33, 25 February 2016 (UTC)

You'll notice that another user reverted your changes, and for good reasons. Your citations are improperly formatted, your sources lack notability, and your language contains personal opinion. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:46, 13 March 2016 (UTC)

The Lead

Your lead is too short, and it's not relevant to the article. This article is about a specific offshoot of Piggly Wiggly, not the company as a whole. You should probably choose a different article to work on. This one has too many issues.

Your new lead is much more promising, but it doesn't match the topic of the article. There's no need to define the CIA - there's another article of that, and you can link to it. Instead, you need to summarize CIA's activities in Africa. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:51, 13 March 2016 (UTC)