User talk:JmFrioux/sandbox

Peer Review

I'm not sure my calculations are correct, but it looks like you have about 4,000 bytes.

Your article is looking really good. The organization makes it easy to follow and aesthetically pleasing. The evidence you give to support your claims enhances its readability while lending it credibility at the same time. I found the information you included very interesting. It made me want to learn more about the subject.

I didn't see any part of the article that I thought needed drastic change, but there were a few places that could be expanded or tweaked. For one, I would have liked to know more about how the Aurora consurgens was used. Also, it is described at the top of the article as an illuminated manuscript, which could use a definition. The citations showed up in the text rather than the reference section, but I think you already knew that. One last nitpicky thing, I think the -ly in the word unusually at the top sounds a little odd; however, that's totally a matter of personal preference, so do with it (or don't) what you will.

I hope this was helpful. Maagicalme (talk) 02:23, 4 June 2014 (UTC)

I was viewing your article and I think its somewhere in the 4,000-4,500 byte range.

Looking at the before and after articles, I see that you've done a lot of work on the article!

I think you have a lot of great sources, I would make sure you clean up the citations and maybe list them under a Citations section.

Major Differences edit: "a couple embraces in a bed" I would use a different word then embraces, embrace would be a term to use as an affection for one another, so embracing a bed doesn't seem like the appropriate word here. edit:"A young servant boy stands at the foot of the bed." This is an incomplete sentence.

Overall the page looks much cleaner. If you could move one of those pictures from the bottom and make it a side picture (what is usually seen on popular wiki pages) then put a caption explaining it, it would give a nice improvement on the presentation of the wiki page.

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Procsworld (talk • contribs) 15:15, 4 June 2014 (UTC)